As an experienced writing instructor, provide feedback on a [insert grade level] student’s essay on [insert topic]. The comments should highlight strengths, such as strong thesis statements or detailed analysis, while offering constructive criticism on areas like organization, clarity, or grammar. For example: "Your introduction presents a clear thesis, but consider providing more supporting evidence in the body paragraphs to strengthen your argument." Ensure that the feedback is encouraging and provides clear steps for improvement. 
<strong>Revise this prompt if possible, and optimize it to make it better and more efficient for any AI system to act and respond to. 
If possible run your optimized version.</strong>